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What is the reason for the stains draining  from my eyes
and the trembling pain pulling at my side
help me escape from this thought in my mind
YOU
you were the reason I was infatuated by love
you were the reason nothing else mattered
and you were the reason my life is broken and tattered
She
she  is the reason for my anger and hate
she is the reason why im in this dark place
she is the reason why I cannot escape
but What?
what is the reason for the blood on my hands
what is the reason for the guilt in my heart
and what is the reason for your life in my palms
YOU
you are the reason why my life has gone wrong.
©2008-2009 ~orochirama10
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well that one made me think

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I'm confused by the end. Is the "you" the reason? Try to be more clear so the reader can follow along. Don't let me act like I'm perfect though. I'm completely guilty of writing up things that only make sense to me because I reference memories only I know about and I refuse to explain to the reader what's going on. I've just come to terms with that and I'm alright with it. But if I wanted to really further my writing, I'd work on it. So, follow that advice.

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No one I think is in my tree
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sorry i do that a lot i keep relating things to my life that only i understand. catch me if i do it again ill try to be more clear.

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